You should have your "raw" field notes from at least one field site visit, (remember, you need at least five field site visits before Apr. 11th) and now it is time to take the next step and convert those raw field notes into revised narrative form. Using your initial observations and comments/reactions from one field site visit, as a basis to expand and embellish in terms of vividness, scenic description, character development, details, and complexity, write a narrative of 300-800 words.
Directions:
*Convert your raw field notes into a narrative of between 300-800 words.
*Write in present tense--as if the event is happening right now as you are writing it and your audience is reading it.
*This is a first revision, so I am not overly strict about punctuation and grammar unless it impedes reader comprehension.
*Have a title for the revised version--be creative
Sample heading for Revised Field Notes:
Marco McDougal
ENC 1101-0012
TR--9:00am-10:15am
Revised Field Notes Assignment
March 18, 2013
7:00P.M., Wednesday, March 13, 2013
Room 206, UCF Student Union
Young Democrats/Republicans
Organizing Meeting for April Debate
They Started Throwing Shoes:
Notes on a Joint Meeting of Young Democrats and Republicans
This is where you actually begin writing your revised notes. Be sure to
use proper formatting as referenced above. Be sure to generate logical
paragraph breaks in your narrative and complete a spell check before
loading your narrative to the blog.
Don't think of this as something you will be sending to The New Yorker. What I want to see is a solidly written narrative (story telling) version of your raw field notes. So long as the sentences are complete, comprehensible, and represent an earnest attempt to recreate accurately your impressions, then you are in the ball park. Sloppy, hasty, and partially complete work will result in commensurate grade compensation for this blog posting.
Michaela Alizadeh
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Prof. Longhany
April 3 2014
Religion and it's Place
As I walk into the church I notice a number of things, the people are so happy and
cheerful. Everyone is greeting one another, I'm walking by a man who stops me and
greets me at the door and hands me a flyer. He's asking me if I have ever been to
this church before, I tell him no and he says "welcome to my church" and tells me all
about the place. As everything begins, the first thing they want to do is sing a song.
I don't know any of the words but I don't want to be the only one not participating so I
stand up and begin to sing. The lyrics they have projected are really helping me
make it through this part.
After we sit down the pastor is reciting parts of the bible. Very confusing is
all I can think right now. I have never really been to church I've always just believed
In whatever I felt like believing. He's telling us moral stories from his life. I see a lot of
people so deep in trance of what he's saying. I've had things happen to me so I
understand the life lessons. I try to relate as best as I can but it's hard for me to just
believe everything he's saying. It's getting near the end and the pastor ask everyone
if someone in the audience wants to share a situation that god helped them with a
situation. I'm watching people stand up, telling their stories I'm starting to cry.
The stories are so touching. Being here is honestly a great experience but at
the same time I don't agree with everything that is said. I think some people need to
understand that you need to be a good person all the time. Going to church every
Sunday doesn't make you a good person. Being a good person makes you a good
person. I did have a good time and I cannot wait to return and research some more.
Hamed Hamidfar
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REVISED FIELD NOTES ASSIGNMENT
April 03, 2014,
11:00 A.M, Friday, March 21, 2014
Masjid Al-Rahim
4962 Old Winter Garden Rd.
Orlando, FL 32811
Mosque - The Second House of Muslims
Upon entering the mosque the man who let me in explain to me that why I should take off my shoes.He shows me to the room where the sermon takes place, and inquires why I am there. When I explain that I am a SSC student, he says that his daughter is studying Islamic studies at the Seattle University. I wait in the sermon room and talk for about five minutes before the Imam comes in, apologizing that he stucks in traffic. He greet me and then is about preparing to give his sermon as people filter in. These people don't make it clear that they notice me, though I am sure they do. Throughout the sermon itself everybody is very focused on the Imam/ the speakers that would sometimes play music. After the sermon everybody that I ask for an interview is very friendly and open to answering my question.
I think that the building itself is a very beautiful structure. Both the carpets that are laid in the sermon room as well as the archways throughout the building are all very intricate and exotic looking. In addition the walls within the sermon room are nearly all windows, this allows for a lot of light and the observation of a beautiful day. Throughout this visit the mosque is very quiet, this contributes to a sense of peace and respect.
When I ask the four people that I interview how living in the United States affected their expression and practice of Islam they mostly share a couple ideals. One ideal that persisted with three of the four people I am interviewing is that the United States freedom of religion is what makes this country great. The Imam elaborates on this by saying that as a Shia sect, they are not allowed to practice their religion because many countries are Sunni dominated, as it is the dominant sect of Islam. This domination is reflected by the government in a prohibition on alternate forms of Islam. The Imam also states that he believes that Islam is compatible with the American ideals of freedom, justice, honesty, fairness, work, and diversity. Some thought must be given to the fact that Islamic American relations recently make it so that Muslims cannot afford to be disagreeable.
What I observe as far as the Muslim perspective on Western influences on Islam is very much in line with what the experts thought within 2011 study. The Muslims with whom I talk to all seems very aware of the fact that American society may sometimes look down on them for being a Muslim, however they also believe in the power of the constitution to protect them. However, this observation don't seem to get in the way of expressing their faith. They harbor a thought that they can participate in American politics, and understand more as normal human beings.
Pentecostal church:
ReplyDeleteTime: Sunday March 16, 10:45am it's Sunday morning in Oviedo Florida victory worship center everyone is very welcoming and I notice older ladies have broad hats on.
Service: Sunday school started @ 10am anyone who dressed a certain way were looked @ a certain way especially shown tattoos, one of the elders have to tell some of the younger guys wearing their pants down low is "absolutely unacceptable in the church of god" and that he should reverence.
The members of the community seem to get along just fine as far as greeting each other.
Was I comfortable in this community? I was very comfortable in this community it was a welcoming environment I was greeted at the door and seated by an "usher" I was being seated towards the front of the church but I felt a little uncomfortable so I asked to be seated in the back.
Praise and worship? The church got together and song songs and dance and praise god it was a ver hip service and enjoyed every minute of it. They had a drummer a pianist and of course a small choir the choir wasn't in any type of gowns are anything is it regular clothing.
What surprise me this community is that I saw women wearing jeans and from my teachings that was never allowed in a Pentecostal church
After praise and worship I notice they started recording the service which was on life stream so that way others at home can watch.
They were very strict with using cellphones I notice the ushers will go to any youths that had theirs phones out and had to make sure they put it away.
The pastor was introduce as the "man of god" everyone had to get up and applause before he come to the podium.
The Pastor Owen Thompson was the one that had the authority over the congregation he did preach and what I notice is that they preach very loudly as if he was yelling and made weird sounds I notice people will run around the church and get into the holy spirit and speaking in tongues but there wasn't anyone interpreting what they were saying which was kind of confusing because when I read the bible it says speaking in tongues is suppose to be interpret
Service was extremely long started @ 10am- 1:30pm
After the pastor preached they called up anyone who needed prayer and while they were praying for the individuals that needed prayer I notice that some of them cried and scream out to god thanking him for what he has done.
After service was done they thank me for coming and let me know that this is where
Love lives and everybody is somebody and hope to see me again.